End Up Alone

[Dave35]

My forray into songwriting....

End Up Alone

 

[JimRayden]

Love the chorus on the rythm part. The song could use a lil' help from drums and an outro. Sounds great!
How did you record the solo? Massive EQ-mastering?

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Jimbo

 

[Dave35]

Thanks!

i recorded everything with my GNX4 then mixed and arranged with ProTracks.

it doesnt have an outro yet because im not quite finished with it. its either going to have more verses or just some fade out playing......depends on if i can think of a few more words. Got a few in mind but illhave to see how they come out on paper.

Thanks for checking it out.

 

[JimRayden]

This song is crying for a bridge. And a change in tone after a few minutes of chorusy guitar and vocals. It all sounds great but the constant chorus-effect-thingy makes the song so monotone. C'mon, you've got a good voice, let it shine without effects.

I see a real cool song coming outta it. after about half or 1/3 of the song, you should turn over to power chords and a chuggy rythm.

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Jimbo

 

[Normster]

Really nice tune and a great basis for taking it in many directions. I suppose it could go to power chords, but it could also go just as easily to harmonized vocals ala "Life In a Northern Town." It'll be interesting to hear where you take this.

 

[Dave35]

Although ive never actually had a mullet, i was a big fan of the power ballad, but i doubt this song will go that direction. Im working on some more verses and a bridge of some sort to atake the tune in a different direction for a bit.

This song is personal for me and actually stems from a conversation i had with a friend a few weeks ago about my past history. I sent it to my Mom and she said it was the saddest song she had ever heard..hehe...so i decided that more verses were in order to cover the fact that sometimes being a lone isnt all that bad.....i date but i dont tie down the past couple years and am rather enjoying myself, so perhaps i need to end it on a happier note

Thank you for your input guys. It is much appreciated. I will keep you posted on the progress.

 

[Myron Stratis]

Sounds great, I really liked it's mood!

 

[Woodyworld]

Nice Job Dave, I liked it - and I've got a mullet !!

 

[Dave35]

ROFL!!!! Woody, you owe me a new keyboard because i just spewed tea all over this one!

 

[Woodyworld]

Originally posted by Dave35
ROFL!!!! Woody, you owe me a new keyboard because i just spewed tea all over this one!

oops!

 

[Dave35]

Updated version. The vocals need to be redone(actually need to be sung by someone else..hehe) but its late, im tired and my allergies are killin me.

End Up Alone

 

[scottl]

Good job Dave. I enjoyed checking it out! For some reason, it reminded me of a Floyd mood. Dunno why....

Scott

 

[Dave35]

Well, the guitar preset i am using for the acoustic is called "Hey You"

 

[Normster]

I like the second clip, Dave. Sounds like you know where you're taking it. Kind of a shame you didn't want to use these guys for backup vocals. LOL

Background vocals

 

[Dave35]

Ive actually got a newer version where i added more vocals and did some harmonize stuff.........hmm, wonder if those peeps are for hire? lol

I was messing with effects trying to cover my voice a bit because i dont like it.....but im really not happy with the way the vocals sounded on this last clip i posted. Going to have to redo it or find someone to sing it for me

ah well, ive got nothing but time.